I (Dream)

[dir]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/5585583762227eb7/

Hello friends, just wanted to share my latest tune to gain some insight and honest criticism. This is an electronic track made entirely from CC-licensed samples. Sort of a 'trip-hop' feel, if you're into that. Feel free to tear it apart, I know there are some problems with the mastering in places.

 

[EngelFaeuste]

I swallow my pride as a metalhead and will say this is actually pretty brilliant!


I didn't say that.

 

[dir]

Thanks EF, you are pretty awesome.

Any criticism as to the mix itself would be nice, is it too harsh for the ears? too abstract perhaps?

 

[EngelFaeuste]

Mix-wise, I find it pretty tight, perhaps missing a little on the bass end of the master track, volumes are pretty good, I can hear everything I want to hear.

 

[THOA]

Damn dude, I really wanna hear. But I can't seem to load the page, man. :?

 

[dir]

for you bro THOA, anything. new link
(if it doesn't work.right click, save as)

 

[blank]

I thought the song was cool, very portishead.
Only thing I had with it was the vocalist, I just don't like her voice.
Mixing wise I felt the vocals sounded detached from the instrumentation, there's this karaoke vibe to the vocals.

EDIT:
Forgot to add something, I feel the vocal melody is rather forgettable. Also, there's this part with bells, i find the bells awkward.

 

[THOA]

Thanks for reposting the link up again, bro. Can hear it now.

Here's my thoughts on it.

On the whole, I think the song on the whole has superb potential. Loved the beat. Sweet sweet introduction placed it right smack in the niche of where it suppose to be niched.

Loved how that same vibe is being carried on through out the song. Melody might not guarantee a top ten chart, but heck, if this goes top ten it will kill the whole mystique that it has built.

Vocals wise.. I like the singer's voice actually. I would agree with Blank that the vocals does not sit very well with the rest of the mix, but actually she's not that far off from the mix either. I like the current reverb you are using, so maybe a VERY SLIGHT bass cut? Or perhaps experimenting with a different, more stereo type reverb on the left and right would help so it can sort of "grip" the stereo mix of the song instead of just standing on a very narrow mono channel? Just suggesting. I dunno if it will work though :?

Further suggestions: Perhaps a slight lift in terms of the songs instrumental would be great if you can add sustained pad note underneath the 2nd chorus to support it to give an upward dynamic, basically to signal to listeners that we are in the 2nd level of the song? I dunno if I am making sense.

I personally like the bell (sounds like gamelan to me). But I think once the vocals come in, it seems to be fighting for attention. So maybe have it out only to be reintroduced again near the end at a down time of the song. I was very much anticipating the beat to come again perhaps in the middle of the 3rd verse till the near end of the song, but you didn't bring it in, so the song had an anti-climatic dynamic to it, a little front heavy.

But yeah, man, these are just stuff la. Just my opinion yeah?

Anyway, sorry for being slow with the collab. Just to let you know I am still interested. But currently having a really really bad writers block. Stuck with finding something to write about!

 

[dir]

Thanks for taking the time to listen and for the fantastic responses so far, I really appreciate it. bro THOA bro, no rush on the collab, I always have writer's block when it comes to anything. Take your time, i'll be looking forward to you spitting out a 16 bar.