Excuse the excruciatingly over-bearing title - I make no excuse for it.
8O
Okay! Inane-ism aside...
Now that i've got your attention...
http://download.yousendit.com/82F8C7E97142F750
That is a demo of a song, very rough.
The song is called " Desensitised " - Its about how we as humans have become so used to violence, pornography, gossip, etc etc ... its a lament, a kind of pleading piece juxtaposed against raging, angry dissonance.
I need some input/ideas/critique about it because:
1) The piano parts sound very familiar
2) The (midi) instrumentation could be improved
3) I feel a need for improvement esp in the songwriting aspect
This is one of the rare times I'm going with a VERY normal kind of playing... nothing funny, little whammy bar action, so the piece should be a little more approachable I suppose.
Also, I took a lot of care to click in the midi stuff... the velocity and so on of the midi was quite carefully done, so dynamics should be there, however - any tips/pointers/ideas are most welcomed.
Come come, take this time to slam the composition, in a gentle way, and give feedback. I would like to make it complusory to leave comments on improvements but I can't so be considerate hor...
8O
Okay! Inane-ism aside...
Now that i've got your attention...
http://download.yousendit.com/82F8C7E97142F750
That is a demo of a song, very rough.
The song is called " Desensitised " - Its about how we as humans have become so used to violence, pornography, gossip, etc etc ... its a lament, a kind of pleading piece juxtaposed against raging, angry dissonance.
I need some input/ideas/critique about it because:
1) The piano parts sound very familiar
2) The (midi) instrumentation could be improved
3) I feel a need for improvement esp in the songwriting aspect
This is one of the rare times I'm going with a VERY normal kind of playing... nothing funny, little whammy bar action, so the piece should be a little more approachable I suppose.
Also, I took a lot of care to click in the midi stuff... the velocity and so on of the midi was quite carefully done, so dynamics should be there, however - any tips/pointers/ideas are most welcomed.
Come come, take this time to slam the composition, in a gentle way, and give feedback. I would like to make it complusory to leave comments on improvements but I can't so be considerate hor...
rayer: (my personal fav part @ 1:35 - 1:41)
