Hmmm.... I've got some comments for both the vocals and guitar work... so here goes...
Vocals.
Andrew, you sang quite well for this song. The thing that struck me the most was that I thought you were trying to add a bit of yourself into the piece... it didn't feel like just another song but you were "into" it and you tried to add some elements that made it more you, like your vibrato and the way you held on to the words at the end of the lines.
However, your pitching was off on some places and the use of your vibrato was abit too much in a couple of places.
Other than that, good effort!
Guitar.
Lets see... As you mentioned above/below, you've only just learnt the song and thats a pretty good shot at it IMO!
Hmmm.. the rhythm tone is more towards the 80s rock tone... I really think there's nothing wrong with that esp if you like that tone. Go ahead and use it because if you like it, it becomes YOUR tone.
Thru out the piece, the rhythm was well played, there's a good vibe going on, really getting into the piece.
For the first solo, which is almost purely pentatonics.. nothing wrong with that.
This is were the vibe started to falter. You didn't sound very confident, and IMO, lacked the attitude to carry it thru. You are getting smooth and pretty fluid with moving around your pentatonics but it felt more like you were pushing yourself... and that took off a lot of the feel and attitude that should come with the solo.
The bends sound better this time round... took some time to work on it right?
Hmmm... note that it can get repetitive if you were to run up and down the pentatonics like in the first solo. Try to move around... slide to notes, skip strings... more to other patterns... don't run up and down up and down. Perhaps you could try playing a pattern, then repeating that pattern an octave higher to emphasize it then move on from that.
All in all, you handled the chord changes well and the playing's smooth. Keep it up!
For the 2nd solo,
The begining arps aren't cleanly done... you gotta work on spacing the notes out, taking care to play evenly and watch your dynamics. Some wrong notes thereafter but nothing too bad.
Ah.. here you added some variety to your pentatonics... double stops! A nice way to emphasize a point in a solo. Good job! Then the rapid tapping there after was another good way to end it all... however, watch out for note clarity.
You've been working at it Satch... good work! Keep it up and you'll be improving in leaps!
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