Very New Band. 3 Gigs. This Saturday Tapestry Though. 1.30pm, Central.

[justheretolook]

Sorry for the long title.

http://www.myspace.com/wearecrackerjack

I really need structured opinions, cus the most common ones I get is 'not bad'. The best ones was some people said it was the work from some English band, instead of my band. so yeah.

But I swear its our own original, made in 2006.

 

[justheretolook]

hmm my plays gone up by 30 overnight? must be you guys, but please need comments. thanks

 

[daryl]

to be honest, it's a boring song. and i find it terribly mediocre and lacking in dynamics. i personally love the libertines too. but marionette sounds like the libertines on a very bad day, and lacking the edge. even fu c k is said without conviction.

flat lining melodies coupled with a voice which doesnt have much character ruins most of the song for me. guitar solo is uninspired and totally unnecessary. it drones on and on and on and the lines are terribly cornily based around the natural scale. no dynamics there, again. no grit, no edge. sounds like it was put in there just so the guy had something to play.

this is just me being very honest. this song will get you guys nowhere. unless you plan on being a terribly mediocre singaporean band, then i suppose you guys fit the mould.

edit: no malice intended. i hope you take my comments constructively. in all, you guys could probably still turn some heads and score some chicks with that song, but it could be much better.

 

[jupzones]

mmmm even though i get what your trying to say daryl, i still feel what you said is just damn cruel.

bad day?

dont take it out on them la.

 

[ikilledkenny!]

haha, nice song, but yeah, needs abit more work, it should be quite fun to gig with though, should be able to see the crowd grooving with you.. but if ur comfortable with the song just have fun with it on stage la.. haha...
anyway, walao.. ur page 1 of ur friends list already got so many hot girls sia... jealous..

 

[tim098]

The song itself is quite nice i think. The tune and the groove, all good. I dont like the overly lazy vibe of the singer though.

 

[KeDraiv]

i personally think the song is quite nice lah. ( not sure how much you can trust that though since i mostly listen to metal and jazz, lol)

i dunno if it's only me but i think i sense a bit of rushing here and there. especially towards the end.

and yeah the singer's voice would definitely be much better if it has more strength to it.

tat's juz wat i think though
haha

 

[vx02]

imo, its a nice song with potential. however, potential is a really strong word, the song kinda lacks feel and depth. the band kinda lacks a total tightness, and you shld be as tight as possible during recording. so yeah, work on it and im sure you'd score yourself more gigs soon

 

[GlypH]

the vox sounds lyk some monk chanting. no vitality. but music arrangement is kinda gd but predictable.too bad it sounds real boring. a gd song to sleep on. cheers.

 

[justheretolook]

hmmmm. ok. like I said we're a new band, and we save the best for live performances. I think the reason it was dull because we don't have the right gadgets, drummer just wanted his drums simple instead of his usual drum-rolls during recording. And I do agree my vocals needing better range, the guitar solo also wasn't greatly done as my guitarist wanted the sweeps to be done live only, and yeah overall I think we need ALOT of work, I do realise that. We'll practice more. As a band.

Potential? I think we do have potential. And btw this was our very first song out of 24+ we have created over the past 2-3 years together, and we decided on 13 for the 'album', but then again, I would look into some of our songs to improve, and most importantly none of the other songs sounded like Marionette. I think.

And yeah we aren't as tight after one of our guitarist left, and the lack of money too, I suppose, to jam alot more.

Thank you softies for the comments, it was deeply appreciated.

P.S; why didn't anyone mention about the bassline? it's pretty groovy btw. And I forgot to ask you softies to use an earpiece or headphone to listen to the song, as it sonds better IMO. well anything sounds better with the 2 gadgets I mentioned, but then again, I think it changes the mood of it all.

Hope more people keep tuning in to our myspace and keep commenting on the current songs there. I really need more comments. Please do state your preferred genre and age too. It would help.

 

[justheretolook]

=KeDraiv

weird, we always attract people who are not into our type of genre hahaha. There is some rush as we played at 170-180 on the metronome.

 

[Siouxsie Sioux]

love the tune..

 

[justheretolook]

thank you.

 

[justheretolook]

=daryl


the reason why i think you're giving us such negative comments is that after i said "we sounded like an english band" you started comparing us to any bands you know from the UK, because you got utterly disgusted at that comment. I know we're not that good but you're giving us an unfair trial.

Do you want to know how I know? Your DP is The Beatles, you love The Libertines, and I bet you prefer fish & chips over nasi lemak anyday just to feel British.

Sorry for the malice intended. but we'll take your comments to prove you wrong. So there's still a reason to say thank you.

You may have rep power, but I got common sense.

 

[daryl]

you're taking me the wrong way man. haha but i got to give it to you for the fish and chips comment, nice one, though it's terribly misused on me.

the reason why i was so harsh is largely because i realise that no one will ever ever be harsh in this forum, not to mention real life. i am just being very honest. take a look at the so called constructive criticism around, compare them to mine, and tell me i typed all that if i didnt really care? i care about the standard of music going around, and i hope you guys would take my words like men and move on.

the comments in this forum would really only make you guys big headed, thinking you got it all made, when in actual fact you can't see past the fact that you guys have a long way to go and are terribly mediocre. you did mention that the song was written in '06. if that song is better than any song you have written up to now, i would expect it to be of some quality if you were to post it up here.

like i said i am honest. i will not bring my standards down to rate you guys and say wow that was impressive just because you guys supposedly suffer some sort of handicap. when i said bad guitar solo i didnt mean bad technically without stuff like sweeps. i meant bad musically. that solo sounds like a freaking dead fish.

and please oh PLEASE prove me wrong. save me from the stifling atmosphere of licking mediocrity's balls

 

[justheretolook]

What do you mean big headed? "take a look at the so called constructive criticism around, compare them to mine, and tell me i typed all that if i didnt really care?" isn't that big headed enough? Isn't it already bad enough that your flaming 1 softie(me, if you understand)? You don't have to criticise other softies in their taste of music. And from what I see, you're the only one who truely hates our song. Maybe you just want to be different from the rest who listens to 'mediocre music'? Maybe you rate the songs in your mp3 better than anyone else who have 'mediocre music' in theirs?

Look I'm also an honest man, and I believe if you want to flame other people songs, create your own 'masterpiece' and prove it so can save yourself from the mediocrity that you're suffering, because do you know why? Because I don't think you can. Probably if you did, your song will sound like an Electrico or GSE wannabe, cus thats what I see in the "Singaporean-music-trend". Or it would be the typical hardcore/punk-rock song.

Probably you hate our song so much for the fact we're different. I believe we're the new sh*t around. And probably be the most popular sh*t in the future, hopefully. And yes we're not perfect, our songs aren't perfect. But what makes you think you are when you, on assumption, haven't even started?

That's my final say, if James could read this, please lock this thread. Because I don't entertain someone whose comments show they are the best in the world. because they think they are.

If you want me to prove you wrong, come down this Saturday. details are at the title.

 

[daryl]

DUDE. god. you need to grow up or something. you said in the first post you wanted CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM. i do not hate your song. i just stated very clearly where it wasnt could and could be improved upon. and if you put the song up just to expect everyone to give oneliners such as 'i like it!', 'not bad!', then SAY SO. you said you wanted something STRUCTURED. god.

if you cant take some simple criticism, i dunno man, thats what i call bigheaded. i never had so much trouble on other open mic threads, you are just plainly looking for trouble with me cause you cant take some honest negative feedback, which i feel is really lacking here. i could go along with everyone and say I LIKED IT, cause seriously, if i just listened to the song while chatting on msn, yes i could say that I LIKED IT. but i actually LISTENED to the song and gave some honest feedback. if you expect everything to be positive, you should just play the track to your family members and friends.

and PLEASE, for GOD'S SAKE, you guys are not different or unique. god. and no one is flaming you. you just got one guy who bothers to type more than the usual shit seen in here because he bloody bothers to pick out parts where you could improve on. god, seriously, grow up

 

[justheretolook]

So what you mean is everyone listens to you. So should I say thank you? Or do I need to grow up first? Or maybe should I drill that-everywhere-in-spore-is-made-up-of-emo-punkrock-bands-or-others in your head? Ok it was my fault for asking constructed opinions, or maybe I wasn't ready for the harsh criticism. But then again, I do believe we are different. Maybe you don't think so, because you can't let your pride down, or your too 'experienced' in this arena, or heard everything else. 'nuff said.

 

[justheretolook]

pm'ed you ok.

 

[john_dzite]

daryl, i think you are a little too harsh there but well it's this is till a forum haha. it's suppose to be an open place where you can state any opinions, not forgetting criticism.

so justheretolook, don't get so work up man. Personally I think that song is not that good also but maybe not down to the standard daryl say til.

Vocal: I don't know if it is the equipment used for recording or the singer himself or not but the vocal sounds a little too dull and doesn't sound that natural. Like as if he is trying to sound manly or something.

Guitar: The solo can be improved. The current one has something missing and I am not talking about technique. The technique is okay. It just feels like something is missing.

Bass: Very well done.

Drums: I think it doesn't apeal much to me maybe because of the equipments used for recording or unless the drumbeats itself doesn't sound that good.

Basically, just improve on those parts I stated you need to then I guess it will sound a lot better.