some of my observations.
1. diction can be improved.. some words like 'stronger' ,'her' wasnt articulated clearly..theres abit of slurring you need to be more crisp.
2. 'never of her' , ne-ver, in the 2nd syllabus u didnt hit the key on the dot, you hit it slightly below pitch, and you sorta 'bended' your note up to the correct pitch
same goes to 'crawling up my affection'