dholguitar
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I love the drums. The intro guitars need some work thouhg if you ask me, cuz it's just needs to be a little more happening. it is also a little off, need to get more on time with the rhythm, cuz the echos/delays aren't putting the accurate eccents in. i think it would be a good idea to put some vocals in, maybe some whispering just to get the feel right from the start of the song.
The part at around 00:48 where it climaxs is a little out of place, I know you're trying to get in insane metal feel to it, but it seems to poke in at the wrong time. But after that the drumming just brings it back, just need to work on the entry cuz it's a little messy and you shdn't be speeding up without the drums duirng that short few seconds.
The vox is pretty good, his recovering time is quite amazing. Maybe you can try to reduce the tension in his voice and get a little more control over his tone. He sounds like it hurts at least a little bit when he sings, which shouldn't be the case, try to get more air flower from the diaphragm rather than forcing up the back the throat from the lungs. Even though his singing is pretty powerful, there are still times that he drops out while holding a word. Try not to use os much of your chest when singing, get more breath.
05:22, the vocals there sounds out of breath, or do you mean to sound exhausted and desperate like death metal normally would? After that the gutiar that comes in again is awkward just like after the intro at 00:48.
It's a great song, yet I can't help but notice that it sounds as if you guys are trying to fit into a blackmetal-mould, maybe you guys can go for something a little more natural sounding?
great song overall, one of the best I've heard from indie bands.
The part at around 00:48 where it climaxs is a little out of place, I know you're trying to get in insane metal feel to it, but it seems to poke in at the wrong time. But after that the drumming just brings it back, just need to work on the entry cuz it's a little messy and you shdn't be speeding up without the drums duirng that short few seconds.
The vox is pretty good, his recovering time is quite amazing. Maybe you can try to reduce the tension in his voice and get a little more control over his tone. He sounds like it hurts at least a little bit when he sings, which shouldn't be the case, try to get more air flower from the diaphragm rather than forcing up the back the throat from the lungs. Even though his singing is pretty powerful, there are still times that he drops out while holding a word. Try not to use os much of your chest when singing, get more breath.
05:22, the vocals there sounds out of breath, or do you mean to sound exhausted and desperate like death metal normally would? After that the gutiar that comes in again is awkward just like after the intro at 00:48.
It's a great song, yet I can't help but notice that it sounds as if you guys are trying to fit into a blackmetal-mould, maybe you guys can go for something a little more natural sounding?
great song overall, one of the best I've heard from indie bands.
