Without You

[sliding.jam]

Artist: Sliding Jam
Song: Without You
No Lyrics

http://www.myspace.com/slidingjam

Hope somebody will share own thoughts regarding stuff.
I am open for objective critic from your side
Thank you for your time, friends

 

[sliding.jam]

any thoughts?

thanks

 

[soft]

Hi there

Just had a listen to your music. Good effort, must have spent quite a bit of time on doing them.

Currently, your music is more like a combination of sound with no clear direction. Though there are some phrases and highlights, it lack a melody.

It is not a bad thing to be without a melody, just that a song without melody would be a little difficult to remember.

If you put your music together with some interesting visuals, the result might appear at Singapore Biennial.

 

[sliding.jam]

thanks for comment

 

[ramblinglibrarian]

Hi sliding.jam,
First I must say I like your attitude in asking for feedback

OK here's my take:
It sounds more like an ambient track. A mood piece. If that's your intent, then it works!

Up to the 2nd minute, the track still sounded interesting. But beyond that it seems to repeat the first 2 mins. I would've made the track shorter.

I can't say there anything distinctive about the track. Have to agree with soft that a melody is preferred. But that's not to say the track is unpleasant. Just that ambient tracks, by nature, are more of background tracks rather than something people can really pay attention to.

OK, that's my 2-cents. Take the comments with a pinch of salt!

ivan

 

[sliding.jam]

okey ) thanks

I am working now on track with vocals