Hmmm...
The tune sounds so familiar... But no matter, this is my opnion:
Since the tune is same all the way, I think where you'd wanna work on is the vocals and the lyrics. You might wanna put in something special there.
IMO, the "do do do"'s are more of don't don't don'ts.
I think the singer, Rachel issit?, ain't reaching the range where her vocal powers will show. The song's too low for her. Try transposing to a key just above her comfort zone. The probable reason why the song is in such a low key is because it was a dood writing it right?
Well, no hard feelings. I hope you don't take this the wrong way. You may take into consideration the things I have mentioned and work on it, or you may not.
I'm just voicing my opinions, hoping to help you out.
Peace out!
L3on2k.
