OM: When I Say

[twoteaspoon]

http://www.mediafire.com/?4yjyymlyyw3

 

[john_dzite]

This is really good! The feel is there. Did you sing this?

 

[twoteaspoon]

yups. kinda like a draft, some minor pitchy parts here and there

 

[Bobqwe]

Nice piece, the mood is there. I'm sure if it wasn't a draft, it would turn out great for you've capture that package in it already. Good stuff!

 

[twoteaspoon]

 

[blueshoes]

well...far be it that i'm a songwriter or anywhere close to being talented, but from what i heard...diction is very bad. cliched lyrics. i could tell straight away you're singaporean chinese...

less cliches, more creative lyrics? ie, john mayer, "my dear we're doomed, slow dancing in a burning room"

that's magic.

you sing well though.

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edit: i just finished a song...but the production is shit. feel free to comment as well. be as honest as me! slam it! haha. ok i'm asking for it. but yah.

www.purevolume.com/theacousticsmellycat

listen to Midas' Matchsticks.

 

[hay88]

cool stuff kev... u have a golden voice!

 

[soft]

for a draft, this is sounding ok. there are lots of production techniques which can improve your song.

i put a score for your current recording next to the items below.

1. music arrangement/performance (2/10)
2. vocal expression (3/10)
3. polish recording/mixing (3/10)


the score are quite low because i know you can do better. :wink:

* i like the fact that you used just a tad reverb and the mic sounds pretty good.