This Bed's Still Empty - RNR Original

[shawne]

whadddup everybuddy its another original song attempt by me :]
please drop your comments on what you think!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XN3q0wIaqDE

thank you!

 

[ohBurnn]

Dayum! ShawneyDepp I am loving this song! Can def see this going mainstream!

Guitar work is great! Very haunting at the part after the first chorus just before you sing the verse. It's definitely something that let's the meaning of the last line in the chorus sink in. Moving!

The harmonies for the second part of the chorus = awesome! Really like it!

I must say that there might be too many words for

"I wanna wake up in the middle of the night to kiss you
I wanna hold you by the hand and tell you things are alright"

It doesn't allow the last words of each line to be sung out. And it sounds super rushed. Fast is okay.. but it really sounds too rushed.

And maybe you might wanna rephrase some of the words in the verses. It sounds kinda cheesy at points. Or at least not really fitting of a song.

Definitely looking forward to you record it in a studio or sth!

Favourited on Youtube!

 

[shawne]

Aye there!

yes i've received feedback about the fast part, def gotta slow down.

Well about the cheesy parts, its meant to be cheesy to highly contradict the title. hahaha.

Thanks for checking it out! Check the rest of my vids if you can!