"They'll Be Strangers" (an original track)

[mtww123]

Hello softies,

It has always been my wish to be a good songwriter and the following is my humble 'first step' in working towards my hope. (recorded in our respective home setups)

Nurul Hari Lesmono and I have come up with this original song entitled "They'll Be Strangers". I have taken feedback on the lack of a climax seriously and am currently working on a new song which would hopefully turn out better.

Meanwhile, if anyone has additional feedback or feel that they could contribute to our setup, please feel free to pm me or buzz me at 98319226.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FNYTFwHCmoA

Thank you so much for your time and patience bros!

 

[xfigox]

Like you've said, lacks a hook so it kinda sound a bit repetitive. Song structure could use some work with, try working with some cliches in pop music, their structures the key changes thingy at the end etc.

Production is good, I think the vocalist has a great voice but it isn't utilized much in the song though.

Overall good try, just needs work on the arrangement.