OM : Myidarre's first original - Entropy

[teraslasch]

Hi, im the composer/keyboardist from the jrock visual kei band myidarre, our first original is up and we need your commeents! thx!
http://s33.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=3VSV5TK5HOLC428KOMVICTP47C

www.myspace.com/myidarre <-- our band's myspace website..

thx ^^

 

[lppier]

The music and the guitars is nice, but I find the vocals a bit not locked into the groove?

Pier.

 

[teraslasch]

The music and the guitars is nice, but I find the vocals a bit not locked into the groove?

Pier.

noted, tx..

 

[thor666]

The lyrics need reworking... doesn't seem to fall on the rhythm at times.

Vocals need some dynamics... sounds like he's talking through the whole song rather than expressing.

since you guys are trying to incorporate J-rock into English songs, do note the way Jap lyrics are written... the pronouncation needs emphasis on certain areas... try not to use "soft" spoken English words but rather "heavy"-toned ones.... (aka heaven, blue = "soft", sharp, crack = "heavy")... ok i'm pretty poor at explaining this but hope you can understand...

i think there should also be more dynamics and variations on the playing..



overall, great song.. just. need some tweaks here and there.

 

[teraslasch]

ok, thank you very much for your criitic, we will work hard with our vox.. we do notice his flaws, he tends to squeeze too many words together if he doesn't compose the melody line, in this case i composed everything including the melody line and he wrote the lyrics.