twoteaspoon
New member
just a draft recording with only 1 verse and chorus. click on the second song. critics welcome. =D
www.purevolume.com/punkd1
www.purevolume.com/punkd1
OE : FIGHT THE GREY SKIES
- Thread starter twoteaspoon
- Start date
The-Warlord
New member
Standard ballad I guess. Vocal melody needs major work -> tuning and I think a bit of development...make it stand out. Keep at it. Also, get a spit pad for your mic 
The songwriting is quite good. The only thing I don't like about them is that the arrangement is too standard - too normal. Try to think of interesting bridge sections and/or endings where you can bring the song onto another level/stage/'scenery' music-wise.
The guitar-playing fits the bill quite well, but I would try to add more plucking tecniques into certain sections - another way to being another dimension to your songs. You can strum on certain verses and pluck on others. Simply doing that will give some of the songs a breathe of fresh air - away from being deemed "standard" fare.
The singing is weak so either you work on it if you really want to sing your own songs. Otherwise, concentrate more on songwriting and guitaring. The singing will be good to help you in the songwriting bit.
HTH
RoRK
The guitar-playing fits the bill quite well, but I would try to add more plucking tecniques into certain sections - another way to being another dimension to your songs. You can strum on certain verses and pluck on others. Simply doing that will give some of the songs a breathe of fresh air - away from being deemed "standard" fare.
The singing is weak so either you work on it if you really want to sing your own songs. Otherwise, concentrate more on songwriting and guitaring. The singing will be good to help you in the songwriting bit.
HTH
RoRK
fibredrive
New member
not bad at all. nice melodies and all but like mentioned before, it could be more interesting. keep on it and see where it takes ya! cheers
